Talk:Infinity Inc/Chimes/Jangling

From Unofficial Handbook of the Virtue Universe

Thank you for reading my stories on the VirtueVerse! If you're here and not sure what's going on, please skip back to the first chapter of this short story.

I am always interested in feedback: "Hey, I read this, and it was not a complete waste of my five minutes!" is actually reassuring on those days where I've been staring frustratedly at a blank screen. More detailed reactions, reviews, and constructive criticism on my storytelling technique will also help me understand what my target audience -- total strangers, mostly -- might enjoy in a story. Even specific areas of interest would be great!

So, please, if you have a few minutes and any thoughts at all on the linked story, consider clicking the "Add topic" button on the upper right and type away! --Jarissa 02:40, 2 February 2012 (CST)

Mature Content Impending!

Chapters 3 and 4 have the Mature Warning content tag applied. Chapter 3 in particular contains some sexual content in addition to its violence. People who do not have trouble with the violence, but for any reason at all ought not be reading sexual content (especially villainous sexual content!) are encouraged to jump over to the Talk page for Chapter 4, which will include a very minimal summary of Chapter 3's events.

If abusive violence is any trouble at all for the reader, now is a great time to assume the rest of this story goes, "Sometimes villains are real jerks to each other! The End." Life is far, far too complicated for exposing oneself to triggery content!

Connections for Chimes

On-screen cast is much the same as listed on the Talk page for the first chapter, with the addition of many unnamed thugs and a Tsoo-esque main target. Sometimes the mission blinky doesn't pop up until after you take out the Defeat So-and-So And Guards set.

References in conversation include fellow II creation Killing Dance and the head of Infinity, Inc, Simon Arkangel.

Also brought up in conversation is the command system programmed into the Hybrids. The Alphas don't typically say the words of the commands when talking only among themselves; they use associated hand motions. When speaking to a mostly-oral communicator such as Opal or the corporate employees, they have to deliberately remember to say the word, and the gesture probably happens reflexively.

Some parts of the dialogue happen simultaneously, alternatingly, or even exclusively in the gesture code taught to the Alphas starting in the earliest stages of their training. Many Alphas wake up from capture or acquisition (and then, in either case, the largest chunk of their genetic redesign and accompanying surgery) with their speech ability physically reduced by surgical redesign of body parts. They're taught a proprietary hand-and-body-movement language to communicate reports and request instructions. The earliest practitioners promptly expanded that "gesture code" language to cover content beyond the minimum requirements of "do this" and "report results". Pieces of various pre-existing sign languages crept into place, including ASL with a northwestern US accent and fragments of Plains Indians Sign Language, and a lot of things made up on the spot by whichever Alpha was most obstinate or inventive in their attempt to get a concept across.